tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-662135716817912878.post1343458812280714894..comments2012-06-23T10:41:32.993-07:00Comments on Ramblings of a Simple Man: ResetGaz Hunterhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06631237715145022814noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-662135716817912878.post-18680597040864625042010-05-27T20:48:55.843-07:002010-05-27T20:48:55.843-07:00Very immersive short story, especially in the begi...Very immersive short story, especially in the beginning. It would be difficult to strip this down into a flash, though you might serialize it, or flesh it out even further towards the 5,000-word limit some zines use for short fiction.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-662135716817912878.post-37297905131471489842010-05-27T17:16:31.751-07:002010-05-27T17:16:31.751-07:00This is quite good. First sentence really grabs at...This is quite good. First sentence really grabs attention. Story unfolds in a way that kept me curious, interested, involved.<br /><br />Last sentence was perfect.Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-662135716817912878.post-83690804423946281392010-05-27T15:06:24.145-07:002010-05-27T15:06:24.145-07:00Very interesting. At first I thought it was like t...Very interesting. At first I thought it was like the film "memento" or the opening to the novel "The Raw Shark Tests", but what lifted it into new territory for me, was when you consider the difference between specific, emotionally laden personal memory - of which he has virtually nothing left - and linguistic memory, in that he could put concepts together and understand them such understanding what a hotel was like - so long as it has no personal stake for him.<br /><br />Very very good and possibly worth further pursuing on your part?<br /><br />marc nashSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-662135716817912878.post-9879644461264732122010-05-27T13:32:58.990-07:002010-05-27T13:32:58.990-07:00Powerful indeed! Very well-written.Powerful indeed! Very well-written.Deanna Schrayerhttp://theothersideofdeanna.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-662135716817912878.post-22524524749612340142010-05-27T12:28:37.215-07:002010-05-27T12:28:37.215-07:00Heart-breaking story, movingly told. I wish those ...Heart-breaking story, movingly told. I wish those "Don't drink and drive" commercials were even half as powerful!Aislinn O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10016307238982902244noreply@blogger.com